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review 2015-02-19 15:13
Keys to my Cuffs by Lani Lynn Vale - Grade: DNF
Keys To My Cuffs (The Heroes of The Dixie Wardens MC) (Volume 4) - Lani Lynn Vale

Well, let's get my first official Booklikes review off with a bang, shall we? Or maybe a whimper.

 

Keys to my Cuffs sounded really good when I read the blurb...

 

You’re the Keys

Loki’s life was a lie. Everything he’d done for the last eight years was under an assumed name for the Benton Police Department. He’d lied, cheated, and stolen all in the name of the law. He wore himself thin, and not even the open road could take away the pain anymore. Then his little next door neighbor moved in, and suddenly he had a reason to get out of bed every morning. Except he was an officer of the law, and a member of a prominent motorcycle club in the area, The Dixie Wardens MC. Neither of which she could deal with.

To My

It wasn’t the scars that covered her new neighbor’s body that scared Channing. It was the badge. The fact that he belonged to The Dixie Wardens MC was only icing on the cake. She should be running away as fast as her legs could carry her. But there’s something about Bryce ‘Loki’ Rector. Something that eased the unreasonable fear she felt every time she came into contact with something that reminded her of her past.

Cuffs

They say love isn’t easy, and it definitely isn’t for the two of them. Loki has to learn to feel again, and Channing has to learn to live. Their road isn’t an easy one by any means, but Loki makes two promises. One, he’ll never let anything hurt Channing again. Two, it’d be over his dead body that he’d ever let her go.

 

I love a possessive, tattooed Alpha-male lead as good as the next girl. With the exception of the name Loki (sorry, I can't help but picture Tom Hiddleston in giant horns every time I read that), the premise of this book checked all my boxes. And, just to be clear, I read the sample before I hit that handy-dandy 1-click button. But sadly, 2 chapters in I gave up.

 

To be fair, I could see there might be a good story buried in there somewhere, and the author's voice wasn't bad. The dialogue was okay, authentic for the most part. I'm not a huge fan of alternating first-person POVs, but I was willing to go with it because there were clear differences in each character's voice too. Also, the heroine worked in a mortuary...eww. Points for originality, but still, gross.

 

My problem was with the lack of editing. I mean seriously, none whatsoever.  An over-abundance of commas, wrong and inconsistent use of semi-colons, weird sentence structure and strange word choices ("yick" instead of yuck?!)--you name it, it was in there. I tried really hard to overlook it and keep reading, but when the word "main" was incorrectly used to describe a "mane" of hair, I gave up. Once my nitpicky brain zeroes in on something like that, I might as well be reading the back of a cereal box for all the interest I have in the story itself.

 

This book has a lot of 4 and 5 star reviews on Amazon so I suppose I'm in the minority, but I can live with that. For the first time ever(!), I returned it for a refund of my $3.99. For that price, I expect decent editing.

 

Final grade: DNF

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review 2014-01-26 00:13
Family Secrets by Dorit Silverman
Family Secrets (Historical, Political, Love Novel) - Dorit Silverman

Synopsis: (Amazon) 

What would you do if your brother, turned out to be your enemy? 

When a child tries to understand something about his parents' relationship, his vision is distorted, funny and touching. If his father has a lover, how could he not be cheating on his wife? Is it possible that all three, and even the lover's husband knew and agreed to this? 

"..Dad tries to Shake off Hoda unsuccessfully He's Stuck to her back. I do not understand what's happening, should I call for help?.." 

Little Abram's thoughts raced when he saw his father in the workshop studio with his sick mother's maid, who also happens to be the mother of his best friend. He did not understand why Atef, his best friend, had left him after this incident. 

When he grew up he had realized what he had seen. He was furious with his father for his betrayal. The Anger and the hurt had turned into an obsession, as Avram is Jewish and Atef is Arab . The complex relationship will fascinate you, and all the doubts and questions that arise in the child's mind, will lead you to gradually uncover this family's secrets. 

Author's Site: Dorit Silverman
Publisher: self-published
Purchase: No link... Amazon is trying to charge for this when you can get it free through BookBub
Reviewed For: This was a freebie from BookBub

Misanthrope's Assessment: 

This was a quick read.  It was confusing at times and there were some technical errors... this book would benefit from a good editor.  The tale of the book, was an interesting one... the blurb says it all.  The blurb also is telling of those technical errors... I fixed the name Hoda... it had it as Huda on Amazon (but not in the book), the name of the protagonist in the book is Avram, not Abram (same difference, but not really). 

The last section is important (book is divided into three sections), and I feel that the content of the first two could focus less on geography and randomness to build up to the confrontation between Avram and his granddaughter over her boyfriend... who turns out to be Avram's brother's grandson... which leads us to another problem that doesn't even get addressed, there is too much focus on the Jewish vs. Muslim/Arab that the grandfather has.

The story needs work, but there is promise here.  I am glad that I did not pay for it.  I am almost curious if this is a translation.  If so, then I think the quality of the translator should be questioned.

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review 2014-01-05 13:31
China Pandemic: Graham's Resolution Book 1
The China Pandemic (Graham's Resolution) (Volume 1) - A. R. Shaw

 I wanted to love this book.  I wanted to be able to give it a good review, but I could not. The characters were well developed, as well as the plot, but the presentation, the follow through... it did not work because of the grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors that littered the 55% of the novel that I did read.

I kept going though... to that 55% where I encountered the following: 

     "She stopped her menstruations and looked at the boy."

Had this been the only technical error, I would have ignored it, but it wasn't.  It was the point at which I felt that all of these errors took away all enjoyment out of reading the story.  I am going to give this story two stars (on my blog- not here at BookLikes or GRAmazon) because I feel there is promise and had the author either employed a professional editor or made use of writer's groups that offer editing and constructive criticism to their members, there would be a good story here. 

I cannot, however, in good conscience, give a higher rating that might spur someone on to purchase.  I gave the book two stars on my blog.  Here I give it one and a half. On GRAmazon, it will get a one.

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