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review 2017-05-13 04:30
A piece of trash, like its subject
Women Who Work: Rewriting the Rules for Success - Ivanka Trump

No word. Horrible book. Wasted trees. 


For more details. Read Moonlight Reader's post. 



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text 2017-05-12 19:47
Who spends their days white-knighting Ivanka Trump?
Women Who Work: Rewriting the Rules for Success - Ivanka Trump

I posted a "review" of this nonsense on GR (and I suppose that reposting it here is probably a good idea, since it is possible that GR could delete it as violating their reviews must be about the book not the author "rule").


This is really nothing more than my unedited ramblings that someone like Ivanka Trump had the temerity to publish a book called "Rewriting the Rules for Success."

Honey, you didn't "rewrite" anything. In order to need to rewrite the rules for success, that would imply that some sort of rules actually applied to you. Au contraire - you've never been subject to "rules" in your entire life. A better title for this book would be "Billionaire Daughters Who Benefit: Suspending, Evading and Transcending The Rules Via Nepotism, Entitlement and Privilege."

There can be nothing that this woman could possibly say that would be relevant to anyone other than herself, or possibly the other gilded daughters born of platinum vaginas into unimaginable privilege.

It's genuinely hard to be a woman who works. Hell, it's hard to be a person who works. Our society isn't great at supporting families. Ivanka Trump's despicable father and the rest of the Republican leadership is trying to make this worse. That makes the publication of this book an even greater affront to women who work. And women who don't work. And men. Human beings, actually.

Ivanka Trump is the diet coke member of the Trump family - she's sparkly, full of fake sugar and empty calories and is attractively packaged. Fundamentally, though, she is entirely substance free.


And now I have some useful idiot claiming that I've personally diminished the integrity of the site, and am not participating properly. Lol.




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text 2016-02-19 07:01
What I'm learning from rewriting my first novel

 I wrote my first novel, The Local Rag, in 2003.


Like most first novels it was a masterpiece.


I sent it out and as the response came in I decided maybe I didn't want to be a novelist after all.


I hid the manuscript in the back of my filing cabinet.


Four months ago I dug it out. It hadn't improved with age, but at least I could now read it without weeping and gnashing my teeth. To my surprise I discovered if you could overlook the very bad writing (which I admit was difficult, even painful) there was indeed a story buried in there, one even more in need of telling today than it was thirteen years ago.


I review quite a number of books by independent authors (see link below to my video book review blog Not Your Friend, Not Your Family book reviews) and most of them are making the same mistakes I made in my first novel. This means if you continue writing for ten more years you should at least achieve my level of skill, which, come to think of it might make you want to rethink your career path, especially if you consider the lack of success I've attained.


But I digress.


What the rewriting of The Local Rag (yes, I'm rewriting it) has done for me is affirm my criticism of the work of new writers - at least in my mind.


To put that another way, I am now rewriting The Local Rag in accordance to what I've suggested many new authors do to improve their work.


And what are those suggestions:


  • Begin with Goal, Motivation and Conflict: what does my protagonist want, why do they want it, and what is preventing them from getting it? Write your GMC down and refer to it each time you begin to write. It will keep your story focused.
  • Don't over explain - especially simple actions and the description of characters. Leave it to the reader's imagination
  • Use adverbs sparingly. Especially don't use them to explain your dialogue.
  • Leave out everything (and I mean everything) you can't attribute to developing character or advancing the plot.


In 2003 the word count for The Local Rag was about 82,000. The 2016 version will likely be about 60,000.


Of course, a significant number of the words deleted are "that" (used 910 times) and "just" (used 279 times) in the original manuscript.


However, I hope the new version supports the theory that less is best when it comes to writing.


Herewith is blurb for The Local Rag. I find writing the blurb before you actually begin writing the novel is another good way to keep focused.



Do you believe everything you read in the newspapers?


Jim Mitchell doesn't.


He's a journalist and the publisher and editor of a community newspaper, The Sentinel.


He gave up a career with big media because he couldn't justify their choice of what to cover, couldn't tolerate the way they edited his stories and would not be implicit in misleading the public to benefit some hidden corporate agenda.


When he bought The Sentinel he thought all that would end. Being owner of "the local rag" he could select the stories, edit the copy and make sure the interests of the community were served.


He would print the truth - no slant, no bias, no spin, and he'd make a living doing it.


He was wrong.


Right from the beginning Jim's brand of reportage rankles some powerful people, people who pay his bills. Then there's the new competitor, a multinational media conglomerate that's expanding its generic community newspaper format into The Sentinel's market area.


Soon it's a struggle for The Sentinel to make a profit and for Jim to keep true to his uncompromising ethic.


When his best friend, Anthony Bravaro decides to run for mayor Jim's hopeful for the first time he'll see an honest politician.


Hope turns to dismay as Jim watches the quest for power turn a good man bad.

Tony's campaign tests Jim's professional objectivity and personal integrity.


When Jim confronts him with damaging information that could end his run for public office he finds out how far Tony's prepared to go to win the mayor's seat - farther than he ever could have imagined.




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review 2013-02-02 00:00
Zero at the Bone: Rewriting Life after a Snakebite
Zero at the Bone: Rewriting Life after a Snakebite - Erec Toso This book somehow reminded me extremely about „The Transporter“ just that the main character was gay this time around.At times the book was dragging a bit but all in all it was very good and I appreciated to read even about the smallest developments in Jack and D’s relationship as authors often like to skimp over these details. To top it off, the story was very well written, no matter if it were a fighting, action or sex scene. I rarely find action scenes this well written and that made this book a little gem for me. I liked the chemistry between Jack and D and the slow emotional building of their relationship. Jack certainly had his work cut out for him when it came to D but he rose to the challenge and was rewarded for it. After all the went through together, some might think this was a situational love but I disagree, the situation simply gave Jack the chance to work through D’s seemingly unending with dynamite decorated steel wall.All in all a great book and if you like M/M, you should give this one a try!
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text 2012-11-03 08:00
Rewriting a Book: 3 Ways to Tighten Up That Text

by Dave Giorgio


1258281 74739780 sxc mihow resized 600So you’ve written a book. That’s not necessarily an easy thing to do. But if you’re a writer and an aspiring author of books, then you are compelled. That’s a pretty great thing.


But what happens after you’ve written a book? Aside from that huge exhale that comes from reaching closure, what comes next? Many authors will tell you what the next step is: Rewriting.


I often write articles, releases, web copy and other documents for my work. There hardly ever comes a time where I will not read through my carefully written work the first time to revise or rewrite it. And I find that the longer the document, the greater the revision process.


This is because a longer document is going to have longer thread. Writing is about taking a thread from beginning to end-- you want to optimize all of the nuances in between as you go from the very beginning to the very end.


Here are some things to keep in mind:


1. Rewriting is an introspective process. It’s a chance for you to look at your book with someone else’s eye, sort of. In other words, as you read through your book, judge it as if it were someone else’s writing.


2. Ask yourself tough questions throughout the reviewing of your text. Things like “Is this dialogue or scene necessary?” “Am I using more words than I need to convey a message?” or “Am I wandering off point?”


3. There are many other similar questions you can ask to make your book better. Make a list of the aspects of a great book. As you go through your review process, ask yourself, “Is this writing meeting those aspects?”


Don’t think this is a new or foreign process. It’s likely that all of your favorite writers ask themselves similar questions, and many more, as they go through a process of critiquing their work in order to tighten it up.




Photo courtesy of mihow.

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