by Simon Bestwick
6 semicolons on one half page is more than excessive! This completely disrupts the flow and prose. Fit more for poetry. Lots of backward country talk and incomplete sentences. I know that's how the author wants it, but dang. An event will happen and in the next paragraph the time has fast-forwarded ...
“In the Lancashire town of Kempforth, people are vanishing.When two-year-old Roseanne Trevor disappears, the local kids blame ‘The Spindly Men’. But even as Detective Chief Inspector Renwick vows to stop at nothing until she finds her, terrifying visions summon TV psychic Allen Cowell and his sister...
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