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review 2017-04-24 12:34
Reads well but lacks depth
The Snow Owl - Jon Hartling,Heather Hartling

The Snow Owl is a fantasy/paranormal story that rambles and twists in its writing about a young family who experience a rather interesting event.

I wish there'd been more time to explore the events leading up to the climax, I feel there would have been a greater emotional attachment to the characters. As it stands, this reads well but lacks depth.

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review 2017-04-24 11:27
Will be the last last one I read by this author...
Euphoric Dreams: Part One (The Quest of Dragons) - Adrian Geiger

This is the first part of The Quest of Dragons and will most certainly be the last one I read by this author.

The list of issues I encountered in this 42 page story is almost longer than the story itself.

If you are thinking about being a writer, publishing books, please do not do what this author has done, and publish something that is barely but a first draft. EDIT YOUR WORK! Get someone else who is good at writing or editing to look it over.

Worst example of a story I've read so far! The only redeeming features, are the fact it was only 42 pages long and the fact that I paid nothing for it!

Things I noticed:

Issues including overuse of the same word in close sentences:
'Very well' is used excessively.
'Tree, deal, wall, Sapphire' all repeated too much.

Overwritten text:
'You will perish a long painful, agonising death.'
There's only four words too many in that sentence.

Changes in POV mid paragraph.

Use of 'He seen'. Wrong!

Some paragraphs are indented, while others not. This occurs the whole way through the story.

Continuity issues at 82%. The group fled with no supplies yet they unpacked supplies when they arrive at Taisai.

82% - wrong use of their:
'The three sat their(there) for a moment...'

86% - if Taisai is the multicultural hub described when they arrived, why would their presence be unusual?

93% - WTF?!? That is horse shit!

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review 2017-04-03 10:51
An early piece by the author...
His Devil - Erik Lynd

What appears to be some sort of slice-of-life drunk dad leaves family story, swiftly takes a turn for the paranormal.

 

Scott is a young boy and the protagonist. The climax is sudden and quite unexplained and really did nothing for me.

 

The writing needs work, too many descriptors that weren't needed, too much telling and not showing (e.g. I was panicking), and in general, simplistic narrative that just seemed bland.

 

Note: only 25% of the book is actually the story, the rest is promotion of the authors other work.

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review 2017-04-03 10:28
Party like it's 1969...
Mate by the Music - Rebecca Royce

With little backstory outside of some name dropping from story two, we see Scott and Nancy partying like it's 1969.

*wink wink*

Get it?!

This felt too unreal, the sex too perfect (I get that one of them is a wolf shifter), but it's all too perfect, the orgasms and everything working so perfectly was just too unrealistic.

I did like these characters better than those in Bar Mate though, which surprised me.

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review 2017-04-03 10:23
Self-destructed as I read.
Bar Mate - Rebecca Royce

There's something about girls 'creaming' their pants that turns me off so fast it's not funny. This little piece was too heavy too quickly and really didn't do too much to keep one's interest.

The characters were flimsy at best, the sex boring and the shifter/human relationship felt totally forced.

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