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text 2016-10-29 16:40
DNF at 27%
First Down (The Guardian Series Book 2) - Max Walker

Because I couldn't even skim far enough to get to the sex (between the main characters).

 

This is an example of what not to do with third person voice narrative. Don't keep your characters so distant that a reader doesn't have a reason to care about them. Don't just tell, when you could show.

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text 2016-01-23 19:56
Reading progress update: I've read 71%.
The Deal (Off-Campus Book 1) - Elle Kennedy

Warning: This book includes racial stereotyping as both first person voice narrators mention how a musically talented black man should be playing American football. Also, one of them refers to said big black man as a monster.

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text 2016-01-23 08:30
Reading progress update: I've read 8%.
The Deal (Off-Campus Book 1) - Elle Kennedy

Shows how much I pay attention: I've mixed my sports hockey ≠ American football.

 

Other than that. This is making me... nope:

 

"Me: U don't have to text me at all. Actually, I'd prefer if u didn't.

Him: What'll it take to get u to say yes?

Me: Absolutely nothing.

Him: Great. So you'll do it for free.

...

Me: Not happening.

Him: How bout tmrw night? I'm free at eight."

 

Learn to take no for an answer, dude.

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text 2016-01-22 18:40
Random thought 2:
The Deal (Off-Campus Book 1) - Elle Kennedy

I really, really don't want Hannah to be defined by her rape, but here we go...

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text 2016-01-22 18:30
Random thought:
The Deal (Off-Campus Book 1) - Elle Kennedy

Does this author know how ridiculously expensive hockey is? How does a single mother pay for her son's hobby? I hope Kennedy has an answer for the character's own book at least.

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