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review 2014-01-21 15:22
Omega Days by John L. Campbell
Omega Days - John L. Campbell

*sighs*


I wanted to love this book.  The characters were great and well-developed- you could identify and if not identify, you could at least root for them.  You will become interested in what becomes of them.  BUT... and this is a great big BUT... there is a lot lacking...

First of all, there were a couple chapters with named characters that came out of nowhere... and you quickly learned they were going nowhere.  Their whole purpose was to die, without adding a damn thing to the story.  Look Mr. Author, we know what we are reading... by the blurb, by the picture on the cover, by the descriptions of the zombies and the sheer multitude of zombies... we get the fact that MANY people died and became zombies.  These chapters are little more than filler to boost your word count.  A decent editor would have told you to cut them and a good author would have heeded their advice.

Second... I'll take issue with the blurb of this book... Father Xavier did not forsake his vows at the beginning of this novel.  I would suggest a little more research if you are going keep Father Xavier around.  Of course, by the last sentence in this book, you have him most likely taking a shotgun blast to his chest (or head)...  all because he was shivering after swimming in water so cold that he had just a few moments earlier considered using to commit suicide... 

That leads me to my third and final point... great story and I would be willing to overlook the faux pas of including many pages that had no bearing on the story, and the lack of knowledge about the Church as it relates to one of the main protagonists, except for the fact that the story just stops.  On the 290th page, the story stops, no conclusions- not even to a few sub-plot arcs... the only conclusions is death for characters. This is a zombie novel, I get it, and that would be fine for some of them, but I feel short-changed.  This is a perfect example of an author more interested in selling books and the almighty dollar than telling a story.  Give your readers a couple hundred pages, hook them and then demand more money for more story... yeah... no thanks.

I am hooked enough to continue... but with a catch.  I will 'buy' the sequels, but I will read them quickly and then return them.  In the past, I have angrily railed against Amazon for allowing such shenanigans, but I will not do so again.  I will take full advantage.

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review 2014-01-18 15:03
LZR-1143: Infection by Bryan James
LZR-1143: Infection (Book One of the LZR-1143 Series) - Bryan James


 Synopsis: (Amazon)

He used to be someone. He used to be in pictures. 

Until he was convicted of murdering his wife and condemned to a life sentence in a psychiatric prison, Mike McKnight was a movie star. A real, live action hero. But the mysterious circumstances surrounding his beloved wife's death pointed a damning finger at just one person: him. He was tried by a world that hated him. He was convicted by a jury who never doubted his guilt. He was discarded and forgotten, locked away by a society that moved on. 

At least until the zombies showed up. 

From a drugged stupor, he emerges into a world that has crumbled and where mankind is on the verge of elimination. He is suddenly thrust into a nightmare of epic proportions when the dead rise as a brutal and terrifying plague on the world of the living. In a landscape littered with post-apocalyptic terrors, Mike and a handful of survivors battle humans and zombies alike, fleeing headlong through danger and despair. 

Over the hellscape of a dying city, to the doubtful retreat of the mountainous countryside, Mike fights to stay alive in a world of the dead, recover his memories, and retrieve a cure to the most threatening plague the world has ever known. 

  Author's Site: Bryan James
  Publisher: self-published
  Purchase: Amazon
  Reviewed For: Purchased via Amazon for my Kindle

Misanthrope's Assessment:

It was a fun read.  Well written, adventurous zombie novel.  I did find that the 'twist' was far to easy to figure out, had it figured out in the first chapter, so that when it was finally revealed, eh... meh about sums up my reaction.  Then, the author just stops.  Like he got bored, or decided that most likely other readers would feel as I did, with the 'meh', so he tried to hook them into buying the next story.

I will not be purchasing any more of this series, and I am unlikely to even sample any of this author's other wares.  If he has any. 

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review 2012-09-13 00:00
The Writer's Compass: From Story Map to Finished Draft in 7 Stages - Nancy Ellen Dodd If you've never heard any writing advice and have never ever read any other book on writing, you’ll find The Writer’s Compass moderately helpful. If you have read elsewhere or even so much as passed by the open door of a classroom where a writing course was being held, this book is completely worthless. Trust me: you already know more than Nancy Ellen Dodd offers. Save your money and your time.

Before I delve into my passionate dislike of this book, let me speak of the good.

The cover is awesome, and I’m a sucker for pretty covers. The designer was fantastic.

I liked the visual representation of a story map that breaks down the parts of a story like one might diagram a sentence. There are several of these, but my favorite is the first one, which she gives in several stages that begin with the basics and grows to include other elements of a story. Size restrictions of the physical book crowd the graph and accompanying text, making me wish a full page had been dedicated to the final product. Not Dodd’s fault, of course, but I thought I’d throw it out there.

The End. Of the good parts, anyway. Settle in, people, because this is a long one.

The Writer’s Compass doesn’t even qualify as Fiction Writing 101. It’s extremely basic and there’s nothing here that isn’t available elsewhere with more in-depth info. (See: The Elements of Style, The Art of War for Writers, The Forest for the Trees: An Editor’s Advice to Writer’s, The First Five Pages, and even Chuck Wendig’s blog.) Dodd tries to hit the major points but her analysis is shallow, leaving the unlearned writer to stumble through the trials of plot, structure, character development, etc. with the dawning realization that none are as easy as she presents with such simplicity. Writing is hard, and she forgets that part.

Repetition. Repetition, repetition, repetition. Two-thirds of this book is padding; remove all the instances where she repeats herself and the book would transform into a pamphlet and not a particularly thick one. Over and over again she gives the same idea, the same suggestion, and—most insulting—she didn’t even bother to change the wording more than a minimal amount. These are absolutely unnecessary reiteration of points that should’ve been made once and then left alone.

One instance stands out so much I wrote down the page numbers specifically for this review: page 88, second paragraph, and page 89, third paragraph. Both of these discuss developing your story’s ideas and returning to a questionnaire at the end of every stage to answer the questions anew. Dodd changes a few words (for instance: “reflect” becomes “refine”) and flips a few sentences around, but she’s saying the exact same thing. This example smacked me in the face because the paragraphs are directly opposite each other on the pages, but throughout the book multiple ideas are presented multiple times with nearly identical wording.

Dear Nancy Ellen Dodd: we’re not stupid and reiterating something ten times is overkill. We’re dead after the first five times; let it go.

Another reviewer mentioned Dodd’s “maternal” and “nurturing” style of writing. Seriously? My mother never spoke to me in a manner that implied I was a particularly stupid child and then tried to pass it off as “nurturing.” In fact, she never spoke to me like that at all, recognizing the basic intelligence of her children. Dodd forgets one of the “rules” of writing: assume your audience is composed of intelligent people as opposed to morons.

At one point, Dodd breaks down each genre and gives a table for comparison. Since she’s juggling fiction writing in various forms, this is a great idea, but she screws it up so badly the pages are worthless. Did you know that a novel has less white space on the page than a screenplay? Or that a short story is shorter than a novel? (If you answered “no, I didn’t know that” to the second question, you’re an idiot.) I wish I was kidding or exaggerating, but I’m not. Those are the exact facts she gives, as if they’re gems reserved for the elite.

Really? I mean, really? Where the hell was her editor?

When I read a new book on writing, I mark pages that contain something new, an approach I hadn’t thought of, a fact I didn’t know or a suggestion I had never heard, and fresh twists on old ideas. A writer never stops learning and never stops honing her craft, but not once did I mark a page in The Writer’s Compass because Dodd was offering something new. That’s not to say I didn’t tag multiple pages: ones that are so awful I wanted to remember them for this review. The task drained my entire supply of pink sticky notes.

And finally, on a more personal note:

Lady, I don’t care about your consulting jobs, your spiritual life, or your obsession with 5x8 index cards. One mention is fine, but when you choose to tell me twenty times, I get a tad irritated. This isn’t about you, so hush and get to the writing.

Don’t just skip this one; run away as fast as you can. You’re better off learning these tools via trial and error through writing than from this worthless book.
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review 2011-09-25 00:00
The Writer's Compass: From Story Map to Finished Draft in 7 Stages
The Writer's Compass: From Story Map to Finished Draft in 7 Stages - Nancy Ellen Dodd Nancy Ellen Dodd has a wonderful approach to writing using the seven step formula in "The Writer's Compass". Her approach to writing uses an easy to follow structure with several visual cues and questions in a way that's organized and engaging - choosing to blend techniques such as mindmapping and plotting details in tables with the different facets of one's story (characterization, plot, etc.) She also gives helpful suggestions and draws from her own experience and education in the explanation of the many ways to approach crafting a story, even down to the level of drawing from your own creative well. The questions she's provided in this work gave me many opportunities to delve into my stories in more detail, and she writes in an encouraging, yet practical way throughout the work.This will go on my shelf of most helpful writing books for sure.
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